A Strange Purgatory (Please Read and Comment!)

[RainbowღDash]

Characters So Far

Otonashi:


Yuri:


Angel (Kanade):


Chapter 1

"Ughhh..." Otonashi woke up to see a girl with a gun, aiming at another girl with pearly, silvery gray hair.
"So, you finally woke up." The girl with the gun said.
"Ahh!" Otonashi was scared and confused.
"Hi, I'm Yuri." She said.
"Why do you have a gun? And where am I?!"
"You're dead. And I'm fighting that girl down there. She's Angel. And she's vicious..."
"Yeah...You're crazy!" He said. He walked down the steps and down to the girl.
"Hi. There's some kid up there trying to take a shot at you...they say you're some killer."
"But I'm not. I'm the class president."
"I should've known you were involved in this stupid game, too!" He said. "You people are nuts! And I'm going to a hospital!"
"But there are no hospitals..." She simply replied.
"What?! Why?!"
"Because people here don't get sick and people don't die."
"Oh yeah?! Well, then prove it dumb-ass! Kill me!"
"Hand Sonic." She said.

Blades popped out of her sleeves. She raised her arm up and stuck the blade right through Otonashi's heart, the blade coming out the other side of his body.

Chapter 2: Coming Soon

[RainbowღDash]

I need a little constructive criticism, so if someone could comment and rate my story so far, I'd really appreciate it! Thank you!

[Fluttershy]

*cough cough*

You need to write more, and then I'll criticize. ;3

[Larvesta]

Yeah, I was thinking that. It's a bit too vague to critique right now.

[RainbowღDash]

I know. I'm trying to write more now. I figured that.

[Fluttershy]

Then GET WRITING!!

[RainbowღDash]

Tomarrow!